Showing posts with label piss-poor writing. Show all posts
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Thursday, May 30, 2013

50 Shades of Repetition


page/line


30.18  …his mouth a hard, impassive line.
62.14     His mouth presses into a hard line,…
71.32     Christian’s mouth presses into a hard line,…
75.33     His mouth sets in a grim line.
95.14     His mouth presses into a hard line.
102.6     My mouth presses in a hard line.
109.11  …his mouth presses into a hard line.
130.25   His mouth is a hard line.
147.29   His mouth presses in a hard line…
152.4     His mouth tightens into that hard line.
214.15    My mouth presses in a hard line.
235.9      My mouth presses into a hard line.
240.18   …his mouth in a grim line.
251.24    His mouth sets into a hard line.             
405.8      My mouth sets in a hard, grim line.
418.12    His mouth is set in a grim line,…
431.25   …and his mouth presses into a thin, hard line.

In a book of 514 pages--  on average, the same phrase every 30 pages.  










And don't pretend you don't know what book this is from.